Revised thesis: Child abuse does not only hurt the child exclusively but
also society at large due to the increased likelihood of criminal behavior and
substance abuse that, in turn, leads to an economical burden on society.
-Arguments on statistics of child abuse leading to criminal behavior and
substance abuse, articles showing how criminal behavior and substance abuse are
becoming an economical burden on society and can be very expensive, and linking
the two to show the possibility of child abuse being the root of the economical
problem with prisons and public rehabilitation programs. Also exploring the
possible solution (the solution being investing in children at an early age) to
the economical problem with prisons and public rehabilitation programs that
cost us more money in the long run- getting at “the root” of the problem being
child abuse instead of waiting for the negative behavior to come up and then
spending money on the creation of other alternatives to prisons and public
rehabilitation programs.
Yes, this is the kind of hybrid thesis that I had in mind. I like how you thought to include solutions, because that can make a thesis or claim more contestable. While this might not be the case here, you may want to look at other solutions offered for crime/substance abuse and argue that a preventative approach is the best solution.
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